高考英語寫作八字訣：挖掘立意 咬文嚼詞

　　2012年上海春季高考英語已經(jīng)悄然結(jié)束，筆者特地原創(chuàng)一篇范文為2012年參加高考的學(xué)生提供一個參考。

　　本次考試的作文題目如下：

　　描述你在學(xué)校的一次午餐，具體要求如下：

　　詳細(xì)描述用餐的情況

　　簡要表述你對這次午餐的感受

　　這是一篇簡單卻需要挖掘的文章，因為如果只是描述用餐情況，顯然缺乏深度，夸夸其談，流于表面。學(xué)生拿到這樣的題目需要仔細(xì)考慮用餐背后的東西。比較容易想到的話題是食物浪費、用餐衛(wèi)生、餐桌禮儀等。在創(chuàng)作范文中，筆者另辟蹊徑，通過大多數(shù)同齡人用餐時的匆忙來襯托“我”的悠然自得，凸顯出在緊張的高中學(xué)生生涯中，作者能夠留有一片心靈凈土，通過飲食來調(diào)節(jié)情緒，更好地面對挑戰(zhàn)，表現(xiàn)出樂觀的人生態(tài)度。此文結(jié)構(gòu)簡單，文筆清新，語言精準(zhǔn)，并運用了高中階段常見的語法結(jié)構(gòu)，不失為一個很好的作文模板，供學(xué)生借鑒。

　　范文：

　　the instant the bell indicating the endof the last class rang, out of the classroompoured all students but one。

　　unlikemy peers, iwas in no hurry tomake a run for the school canteen, to rushthrough lunch and to return to the classroomfor homework. i arrived at the canteenwhen amassive queue had formed.waitingformy turn patiently, i smelled the aroma ofthe appetizing food. greasy as some dishesmight be, thewide range of food preparedby the schoolwas superior in nutritional val－ue to that found elsewhere。

　　the typical schedule of a highschooleris extraordinarily hectic and thus lunch breakis a rare timewhen overworked students canwind down and enjoy the pleasure providedby the flavorful food. imake it a point topampermy taste buds by savoring every littlebit of taste in food.what i usually like todo over lunch is have amindless conversa－tionwith a couple of studentswho have alsolearnt to smell the roses along the bonebreaking journey through high school. werounded off our lunch with a dessert, re－freshed and satisfied。

　　come to think of it, it is not the foodbutmy attitude towards life that affordsmepleasure and empowersme in facing up tovarious challenges。(219words)

　　一、語法解構(gòu)

　　現(xiàn)在分詞作定語 the bell indicating theend of the last class rang

　　倒裝句

　　(1)out of the classroom pouredall students but one

　　(2)greasy as some dishesmight be

　　不定式 iwas in no hurry to make arun for the school canteen

　　狀語從句 i arrived at the canteenwhenamassive queue had formed。

　　現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語 waiting formy turnpatiently,

　　過去分詞作狀語 the wide range offood prepared by the schoolwas superior

　　代詞用法

　　(1)thewide range of foodprepared by the schoolwas superior in nu－tritional value to that found elsewhere。

　　(2)enjoy the pleasure provided by theflavorful food

　　并列句 the typical schedule of a highschooler is extraordinarily hectic and thuslunch break is a rare time

　　定語從句

　　(1)thus lunch break is a raretime when overworked students can winddown

　　(2) a couple of studentswho have alsolearnt to smell the roses

　　主語從句 what i usually like to doover lunch is have amindless conversation

　　過去分詞作主語補足語 we roundedoff our lunch with a dessert, refreshed andsatisfied。

　　強調(diào)句 it is not the food butmy atti－tude towards life that affordsme pleasure

　　二、詞匯解構(gòu)

　　pour out沖出

　　rush through草草了事

　　amassive queue 排長龍

　　greasy油膩的

　　aroma香味

　　extraordinarily 特別地

　　hectic忙碌

　　flavorful美味的

　　wind down休息、放松

　　pampermy taste buds寵愛我的味蕾

　　smell the roses [習(xí)語]享受生活

　　bone-breaking 累人的

　　empower 給人動力